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Lord Ashram31 Oct 2017 7:06 p.m. PST

Hi all!

Don't laugh, but as part writing exercise, part boredom, I wrote the start to an homage to Bernard Cornwell…basically the ultimate comfortable Sharpe story!

If you guys would mind stopping by the blog to read the opening excerpt, I'd enjoy that!

link

And sorry, the last two lines of the excerpt on the blog shouldn't have been included…. I'll delete in the AM:)

Grizzly7131 Oct 2017 7:39 p.m. PST

Nice! I liked it.

I could hear Sharp and Harper's voices as I read it. I think you captured the feel just right.

bandrsntch31 Oct 2017 11:03 p.m. PST

Not Coornwell, but great reading none the less. Can't wait to see how it turns out.
Something wrong with this sentence,"had managed to peek in through the slats of the shutters and make get a rough count of Frenchmen". I think "make" or "get" needs to be deleted.

Is a shame Cornwell doesn't do any more Sharpe stories. There's really nothing else as good as them so it's nice to see someone revisit our hero.

Personal logo Artilleryman Supporting Member of TMP01 Nov 2017 1:11 a.m. PST

Nicely done. It certainly captures the spirit and, more importantly, makes you want to find out what happens next.

arthur181501 Nov 2017 2:50 a.m. PST

Entertaining, but I'm not sure you have totally succeeded in recreating Cornwell's style – if that is your intention.

The reference to 'paygrade of a Captain' sounds anachronistic; then, one would have said 'rank of'.

dampfpanzerwagon Fezian01 Nov 2017 8:02 a.m. PST

Great and thank you for posting it.

Tony

Lord Ashram01 Nov 2017 8:27 a.m. PST

Hey guys!

Thanks for reading, and the comments! It was funny… I hadn't read it since I wrote it, and then last night I remembered it and gave it a read, and sort of enjoyed just… reading it!

Griz, Artillery, Damp, thanks for the kind words! Yeah, I was hoping to hit all the notes, and all of the traditional things you expect in a Sharpe book. Yeah, I was hitting each note in a WAY condensed number of words, but felt it was still worthwhile:)

Band, totally an error; I literally haven't done one second of proofreading and revising, so there is a lot I would change, now that I've seen it again… gotta find the time and energy:)

Arthur, totally correct about that phrase, if I get to revise I'll be sure to change that:) Was there anything specific about the style that stuck out? A friend of mine read it and felt it was "too simple" in terms of vocabulary… any specific things you noticed?

I actually have the whole plot ROUGHLY sorted out… not sure I should spoil the basic finale? If nobody cares, I'll be happy to.

14Bore01 Nov 2017 1:33 p.m. PST

I only have 1 of the Sharpe's series on Kindle, but if I see them in the used book store I would pick them up.

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